Tuesday, 1 March 2011

Vermeil

VERMEIL

-noun
1. Vermilion or a similar bright red colour.
2. Gilded silver, bronze, or copper.
-adj.
Bright red in colour.






















Vermeil ghosts.
That is all I could think of
scanning the kitchen for signs
of you.
of life.
of hope.
You were all over the place
and nowhere at all.
Years have passed
on the kitchen walls;
meanwhile vermeil has turned to rust.
They still have not found
your body.




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16 comments:

  1. Tight, chilling piece. Nicely done, with a bit of a tart ending.

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  2. Like the twist at the end!

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  3. Dark and mysterious, two of the best qualities in an intriguing story!

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  4. Ooh, I love a mystery.

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  5. Definitely eerie..my kind of tale..thanks!!

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  6. Ooo, nice! I love a good mystery! "You were all over and nowhere at all" is a really great description of absence. Great write!

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  7. Strong piece, to be sure! I'm looking around to see what might be creeping up on me...

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  8. Like Alfred Hitchcock!
    Mine is quite different:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/02/ideal-afternoon/

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  9. Vermiel is a color difficult to describe with mere words ... you have used it beautifully in this Magpie!

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  10. Chilling. Don't look at me, I'm not searching!

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  11. Dismembered, perhaps?!

    (Small point - methinks your meant 'years have passed' verb... not 'past years' object?

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  12. Good point, Jinsky! Indeed. Thanks.

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  13. Chilling but of so beautifully worded.

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  14. haunting...


    outstanding job..

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